Alright Addy... not sure I like you picking your own topic bud... Just throwing it out there. But I'm here to do the opposite of you these days... feed.
See what I did there? You know, because of your diet? Let's move along...
I loved this. Had everything I look for in a topical. Technical ability on display while telling a great story. Also, you're tugging at my heartstrings making this about a killer of a serial killer...
"Absolute carelessness, have you ever thought of how many car accidents you barely missed?
How many serial killers you’ve passed in public and just weren’t aware of it?
When the reapers at his most stoical that’s when he’s also his scariest"
- Amazing beginning and captures the readers interest.
Could've done without "the notification becks"... just say beckons man. It still works.
"I whip around 2nd Avenue, blazing through the streets
New York seemed a lot more empty than usual, or maybe that was me...
The con to a photographic memory is I remember every scene
The dismemberment I’ve seen, bodies laying defenseless in my dreams
Ghosts of a past life presented in red tinted visions
Am I looking for the man who did this? Or am I looking for forgiveness?!"
- Raw, unbridled skill on display here. Imagery was tremendous.
Dialogue section was pretty well handled. It's tough to do, maintaining your cadence and technique without coming off like its forced, but you did well.
"The killer of a killer, the irony is I no longer am innocent
His blade’s body count is nothing to my own ignorance"
- Loved this.
The asylum angle at the end coupled with that cliffhanger really tied the piece together nicely. This would've been tough to beat and Adonis knew it...
This is called a no-show KO. I've had enough of those to know it's a compliment.
Great stuff man. Thoroughly enjoyed it and read it twice.
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