[Adonis]

Halo - good Lord man you went in. I typically like the darker verses and this was no different, but something about reading a coat hanger abortion was a bit much. But the train of thought here was so erratic it worked. Half way through or so I gave up on following and just read, but it clicked. Like this piece was a pure cluster fuck of imagery in droves but that's really the shining part, the chaos in writing matching the chaos in the story. I felt you forced some rhymes, but again, this kind of help to build the piece on second look. It sort of just fit the build if you will. All in all this actually was one of the most fun reads I've had, fuck the league, I'm saying reads in general, like in real life. It was fast past, understatement, and just grabbed my full attention for it's entirety. This is all coming from someone who hates long verses, which is why I try and keep them as short as to the point as possible. You essentially produced the opposite of me, but damn if I didn't fully love this read. I feel like I'm only puffing you up here as there were instances I did not like, however I'll leave it at that, because the kudos is well deserved. Great read and I mean that in every with all sincerity.

Doms - perfect opener this far, opening stanza has set up for a clear path peeking my interest fully. Your concept of the judging or deciding she'll, in this case Michael, growing over judging because of over population is a stand alone stellar concept. You executed the storyline masterfully. You have me insight as to why he's over his job, and helped me to almost feel sorry for the poor guy. You had, for the boat part, as solid flow as can be, then in some instances the lines worked in building the narrative but flow wise, I can't say fell flat, and maybe only because the better rhymes lines out shined, but the down parts were there is what I'm saying, in flow only, not in storyline or concept. I enjoyed this read, it was both captivating and eye opening in terms of thinking as angels as 'human emotion" brings. Now I'm not religious, so I might be a poor judge on this matter, but I have read many Bibles across many religions just because I enjoy reading how people think and finding good in every corner of life. In any case, this verse really did string a song, err, movie rather. You painted the picture nicely, then expand beyond it in a way I would definitely not have spun, so points for that


Vote - the toughest vote of the season for me in all honesty. I've only read 4 other verses, but can't even remember them, but these two I bet I do remember tomorrow if asked. On one hand, the chaos of halo was just so intriguing to me, it fully immersed me into a world that did not make sense, but oh did I enjoy it so much. Meanwhile Dom simply went classical typical to me, minor story but heavy on the concept while developing characters. I forgot to mention earlier the fact that the most of his wrong doing was so petty, but that tired in perfectly, thus, legit made me chuckle in realization in a sense.


So like I said, very very tough vote. Nothing else I can explain. So just gonna write a name after another read of each


V/ brokenhalo - i thank you both for making this so difficult, there are no losers here, just one I liked a tad bit more