Thought this was a cool battle but it wasn’t as close as I first expected it to be..
Hal0:
Thought this was your most detailed verse of the season but also your worst verse at the same time. Though there were sections that were really good, there were sections that were really bad and unnecessary as well (see the whole farting section for reference) I think you get too many ideas at once and just unload them one after another without really giving some of the brighter ones time to be fully fleshed out first. I think you need to focus more on the story that you’re telling, which was actually good in conceptually. A drifting homeless person who’s seen all these places/situations, kind of felt like Forest Gump or something but not on the same level. No matter I think that’s where the fault lies, it’s not in the detailed writing itself it’s more so in the incomplete story that has a lot of potential. It’s kind of similar to Candy’s problem tbh
Dom:
Another great verse here in my opinion, I keep expecting you to slip up and do something like Blue did this week, but it’s yet to happen, you’ve only gotten better as the weeks went on. I think the way you mix comedy into your verses makes it feel more human? Like the conversations, the main character hating his job and really half assing it. Really funny to think about these angelic beings having our same worldly problems even in the great beyond. Really awesome flow and content, there were a few lines where the rhymes didn’t match perfect but i overlook it because I believe you’re a foreigner too? Could be wrong but even so that being your only mishap Is great . I also like that you paid more attention to your ending this week, felt more definitive and climactic than week two: and referencing your opponent was a good approach (unless it was simply a coincidence) idk great verse man
Well my vote goes to Dom as he told the more complete and better overall story, good work gentlemen
V/Dom
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