[Blue Bayou]

Originally Posted by Universe

Eviction:

This was good man. Loved the word choices. Cool multi's and schemes... some vivid imagery on display here. Story fell to the wayside, but ultimately I didn't have much of an issue with it. Flow was long winded at points, but for the amount of content you packed into your bars, it's definitely understandable.

You're focus kind of jumped place to place but you were still able to loop in some personal shit and keep it tethered to the picture, letting it stray outwards, yet keeping it semi-relevant. Tough to do, but you did it pretty well.

Overall, just a solid read. Technically proficient with some well thought out concepts mixed in.

"Accepting grief can destroy a man, so you need a place to escape, a haven.
Art can tell a story, or withhold, showing only a piece of what you gave them.
Critics called it a piece of shit or trash, I was brazen because it was a statement,
Staying complacent, erases, creations, no love of art because now you hate it."

- loved this.


Blue Bayou:

Started off well enough but as soon as you mentioned Barcotic I just went ughhhh.... because I knew where this was going. You tried to play it off like you didn't have time but really you just couldn't think of anything passed the first 3 lines.

That's called the topic beating you, Blue.

I mean, you're kind of just clowning the entire idea of writing topicals from that point on and calling everyone nerds which is about as original as "urine over your head" lines... which ironically, you clearly are. I haven't seen you write anything of 'substance' for more than a week or so without reverting back to this kind of stale bs. Which is unfortunate, because somewhere in there you have the ability and the drive to actually write and not to be a complete jackass all the time. But for now, probably best to just go back to where you're safe, my dude.

This ain't for everyone.

Vote: Eviction

I didn't call anyone a nerd, my wife did... and I scorned her for it

Don't try and spin that I love the NCGs