Sinacog:
Classic. Didn’t really pertain to the topic and sometimes it seems like you’re just throwing words together to make them rhyme. Like why tf would you wanna be a mammoth skull? Great job bro
Eviction:
Honestly though you didn’t dive in too deep here this verse was really good. The rhyme scheme and flow felt smooth throughout, I just kind of ebbed and bobbed through your story all the way to the finish. Only complaint is it just lacked anything really powerful, I thought your ending was cool but I felt like it could have been a little stronger. Still like the image of this toxic love lasting even after one of the participants dies, and then just bringing it full circle by him haunting her back like she did to him in life. Super solid man
“ We both had a vendetta, getting revenge on her will be bittersweet.
But she is so cold she can disappear for eternity and never miss a beat.
She’ll plot the end of me, over simple arguments when we disagree.
She would stab me in the back, but it would only set my spirit free.
She lives for my misery, she has no purpose if I finally close the curtains,
Not realizing I deserve this, the reward for being known as worthless.
I knew what I was getting into, for some reason I always chose a serpent.
I’ll jump in the blood ocean to drown, but I know she’s below the surface”
Loved this whole segment.
Overall I didn’t even have to read Eviction’s verse to know who was getting my vote. Sinacog is stuck in his ways.
V/Eviction
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