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Old 02-09-2022, 08:40 AM   #15
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[QUOTE=Dominate;819222]No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking

LOL worded very clean, reminded me of Killing Spree’s stillborn line from earlier in the tourney if I’m honest.

Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin
You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen

lmao

She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square
Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer”

Nah I wasn’t so keen on this one, I get the idea but the execution was lacking for me

& look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest
I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest

I wasn’t keen on this one at all personally, felt a bit lazy if I’m honest.

I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon
Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him

Nice idea, not seen this done before.

My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud
Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too

This one missed for me, just seen too many similar to this I guess but not necessarily bad, I just thought it wasn’t the most original concept

Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard
Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard

This is almost the complete opposite of the line above, worded well and a great idea. Very strong

People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it
If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents

Ehhhh I was kind of indifferent about this one, not entirely sure if I caught it or not to be fair.


Overall I think Dave had a very strong showing here, Dom also had a banger in MasterCard which was arguably LOTB for me personally, Turn Down For What was good also. Aero had that anus line which completely caught me off guard and I thought it was hilarious, Fresh kind of had ideas I half-liked but his wording took away from the payoffs pretty heavily to the point where I felt like they were back to back light jabs not really doing much damage to their team at all. I think that’s what lead me to my decision here, Aero/Dom kind of had a consistency to them where I felt they did better as a team overall than Dave/Jayson did here. Dave and Dom were prob the strongest two overall but I think Aer/Dom did the best as a cohesive unit here.

Vote - Aero / Dominate
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