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[QUOTE=evaD;819221]Look,

we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas
beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters.

I don’t get the Dave&busters thing, maybe I’m missing something but oh well. This was a miss for me as I don’t get it. Sorry.

while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow
shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >>

Ehhhh, I get it but it’s really light to me. Just okay, lacks any real sting to it.

& every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me
my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny

Again here it’s kind of light in its execution, lacks punch power of anything either humorous or cold blooded. It just feels a bit flat in its payoff.

yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author
Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater.

I did feel this was better conceptually, for sure, but again here the wording made it sort of easy to telegraph where it was going as soon as you read castaway and then it doesn’t have a misdirection to the execution so there’s no real zing or anything to it come the punchline, it’s just sort of statementish but doesn’t feel like it does any damage to the opposition.

More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch
Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz

This was better conceptually, kind of wordy I guess but I’ve been playing Wordle too recently so I fuck with it

Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip
You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss

This was nice again, worded well and with humour to it.

& Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem?
Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin

Nah, this one was a huge miss for me personally. Not a fan.

The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume
Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room

Concept was absolutely brilliant, never seen that done before, execution maybe lacked some of your usual humour for me but what a blinding idea to tie in the two of them. I liked the creativity of this.