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Old 01-08-2022, 09:41 AM   #5
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Ayo my shooters'll give Ans that bombshell actress flair
scope over the eye & BANG.. u curl to one side like Jessica Rabbits hair.

I like this conceptually, the execution kind of let you down here to be honest. A lot of the time I enjoy the simple but effective route, this one seemed almost too simple a connection with the similie and that left it falling a bit flat to me right when it came to where the zing was needed.

That gotdamn lisp IS the reason you never can function
Boyy u are Toast.. but when i be yelling Speeeeech a therapist is coming.

LOL I liked this right here, nice bit of misdirection earlier on to set up for the payoff. Nice little personal attack and this was done well.

AKs everywhere, ammo unlimited.. we leave nothin spared
grip those hard, Flinstones car; the Auto got ya whole family running bare.

I’ve seen the Flintstones car referenced previously on diff lines but not around the Auto got ya whole fam running bare idea so this one gets props from me, I liked both the concept and execution here. It’s worded well, and it’s fresh to me, only mark against it for me is that it’s a generic insult where I prefer personals.

send em back to RR w/ news our levels just too high..
ya'll carrier pidgeons on our path.. footnotes who'll end up cutting ties.

Nice idea, not seen this done before either so it’s fresh to me. Again, I would have preferred something personal myself but as a generic bar it works and was worded well enough to hit.

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