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asian house party…til shots from the 12 gauge start disturbing the function
you’ll see more kicks at the front door than people observing our customs

I liked it, felt it could have hit harder maybe or been worded more harshly but not bad, just a light jab thrown.

dweeb ass meathead…i could tell the gear aint been kind to res
pull up on him like his avi - grippin iron im inclined to press

I preferred the wording on this one, more aggressive and attacking the opposition. I’m not overly a fan of lines about people’s avatars to be quite honest, and it’s not like these two are unknowns with nothing to use against them so there should be a trove of stuff that could have been used other than the angle. This wasn’t bad; I just felt more could have been done and better utilised.

whole crew loaded w/ techs & shotties
red rover.. u bump into my team, everyone of em got they arms out ready to catch a body

We’ve seen a few of these done similarly, off top I recall a trust exercise flip on a similar idea so I can’t give us as many props as I may have but I do appreciate the red rover twist on the older catching body idea. It’s executed well too.

droppin gems.. inf act eye of the tiger, one uppercut lends em a facelift
Aladdin treasure - soon as this monkey puts hands on me, this cat's whole head'll get caved in

This is good, nice concept to it, maybe a little wordy to have to get the full thing out but I fucked with it. Left field kind of attack and unexpected.