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Old 01-07-2022, 01:53 PM   #3
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Evad acts gangster til I drive thru then he's certainly friendly
The only way Dave'll square up when it comes to beef is burgers at wendys

I wasn’t a huge fan of the beef/Wendy’s angle in truth, that’s been done forever, but the drive thru in the setup wasn’t missed by me either and was cleanly done. Nice wording to this also, it just felt a little i fresh conceptually really.

You faggots think ya'll sick...but this test'll have ya halt..
Cuz this stick to your face? Gon' lead to a negative result

I liked this better, nice and clean hit, short and sweet. This one was also worded well, payoff coming just at the right moment. More like this please.

If I let the bucs fly? You should jet before they start mowin ya down
Yeah once the GOAT targets ya, you leaving topless like Antonio Brown

I’m not sure who Antonio Brown is so maybe this one has gone over my head, I’m guessing he plays for the Bucaneer’s somehow from the setup alone but I don’t care to Google references personally. This one felt like a straight jab to me anyway, lacked the impact of the negative result line earlier for example

I throw the kind of combos that end up rocking ya life fools
Y'all are just a combination we'll never remember...lockers in high school

Nice idea conceptually but the execution wasn’t my favourite, I felt like this could have been worded better to pack more of a punch to it.

A few misses, one that really stood out for me, a few more generic insults but overall not too bad. If I missed the Antonio Brown reference entirely I apologise.

I’ve got Fresh and Dave winning here.
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