Not bad, for the most part I really liked it. Thought the content wise pretty simple, at the same time, what made your first verse interestin was how you were able to form a sequence of events to make a statement. It had a good rhythm to it tho, if anything try to add some more punchlines, not too many tho. But have enough to make it stand out from just your average everyday rhyme. All in all, wasn't a bad drop. Keep writing, and nice work!
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