Force-feeding the reader rhythms. It can come off pretty damn nicely in segments, and the other times when it's less inspired, the flow is still tangible, so it ticks along. I fucked with that nod to Raid: Redemption, that's a film I'm a fan of.
You rhyme a lot, and go where you like with the content. Overall i'd say it was cool, just not a fan of your style.
Last edited by Eŋg; 08-14-2013 at 02:00 PM.
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