Sharp... Your sense of rhyme can be fucked with. This verse didn't do much for me, but at the same time I didn't hate it. Light-hearted and lazy, felt contrived. But certainly a smile-inspiring quip, or two. But not that Mario line. Nerd.
Malachi... This was ok. It was a bit better than that in fairness, while you reached a little bit with some lines, it felt the most organic of the three verses with some real energy. I can respect that. I ain't mad.
Camp Bell... fairly enjoyable. Slightly unusual scheme with the structure (talking letters). You were limited in your own slavery to the need to rhyme, so much. It was still pretty good overall.
Solid tripartite.
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