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Old 09-19-2021, 07:10 AM   #8
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Good stuff.
I liked it all but I'll highlight a couple lines where I loved the rhyme.

Ambient jazz: the trolley tram rattles the tracks

A poetic release; so romantic and sweet.


Great openers for the stanzas. I enjoy those quick rhymes more than long bars with end-rhymes that take forever to get to.

Good tone of jazz and romance.
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