[Soule]

MMLP, this was alright. Honestly wasn't really feeling the concept of it as there's not a ton of depth to it and it's more of a "life sucks" type of rant. Not super creative or original and left a lot to be desired especially with the topic in mind. Your rhyme scheme was very hit and miss for me personally. You'd have a few fire bars and then change it up awkwardly and throw the read off. Happened multiple times through out. Not too consistent. Not a ton of imagery or emotion involved here so can't really shoot feedback there. Overall it kinda felt like you struggled to find motivation and after you asked for a new topic in the chat thread I'm guessing you just weren't feeling it and just dropped what you could.

Universe, bit of a rollercoaster as far as vibes go. It started out with me going "oh fuck yeah, I love alice in wonderland." to "okay, kinda getting Clockwork Orange now..." and then even before you went full Arkham on us, I was like "shit, is he going the batman route?" which you then did lol. This was a cool piece to read. Crazy how you kept the same rhyme scheme going the entire piece. I don't know if I could pull that off personally with something this long lol. Guess it helped that you kept your internal multies minimum. Flow was consistent the whole way though. Imagery was on point, not a ton of emotion but a piece like this didn't really require it. Good read my guy.

Overall this was a fun battle to read. I do feel like one writer was a lot more motivated than the other or at least able to maintain inspiration better. One piece was a lot more exciting to read than the other from multiple spots, I'll categorize shit ...

Creativity-- Universe, hands down. Seems to be a category he really thrives in as both pieces I've read from him were original and fun to read.

Entertainment-- Universe, I had a lot of fun reading his piece between the content and the flow.

Flow-- Universe, a lot more consistent and didn't really skip a beat from start to finish.

Rhyme Scheme-- Universe, though might've been a tie if MMLP didn't slip up every few bars and try to change shit up so often.

Consistency/Topic-- Not sure either really tackled the topic in the original post but Universe mentioned shit from the picture while I feel like MMLP's seemed more directed at Universe's avatar than the topic Cereal posted.

Literary Devices (alliteration, assonance, allusion, etc..) -- Universe

Emotion-- Tie, neither was all that emotional honestly.

Imagery-- Universe, pretty easily. MMLP's was more of a rant than a story.

I got Universe taking this. Great job fellas.