[Objective]

You catch the essence of Dracula really well in this one. His poise, seduction and so on. Endearing to read but keeps you at the edge of your seat until he finally has her soul and body in his grasp. I enjoyed the first stanza the best, then third and the mid kinda fell a little bit short at times.

Nitpicking but the repetition of "her" was used quite a lot in the mid section and became a bit redundant to me. Even though it is a basic word I would still be wary of repetition in this regard. Thought you circumvented that really well in this portion of your piece:

I offer immortality, neither dead nor alive, you'll feel like a dream,
to roam the land a queen of the damned, such a precious thing."
She contemplates her options, coughing through the pain,
this goddess seems mundane, sobbing, confused and drained.
^dopeness

Really enjoyed the break up between each stanza, the tone and imagery of the piece as a whole is fresh. Intro quote sets the mood, first lines of the first stanza gets the atmosphere going and keeps it up to the end. Nice use of multies, flows well and you pay close attention to syllable counts in a poetic way. Good stuff for sure, enjoyed the read.