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Old 08-22-2021, 04:04 AM   #5
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Ehh was alright. A lot of the rhyming was basic, and a lot of times you were rhyming the same word twice. (Rhyming rights with right, justice with injustice etc) but I dig the sentiment behind it. There’s some real life content here, just work on finding better ways to say the things you’re saying, flesh it out, dig through the thesaurus, get creative

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