master rock:
Great opener
Your piece is fairly simple with a lot of one syllable rhymes. I'm not saying that's BAD but in a tourney where people string multis together with complex plots it might hurt you, just saying.
A lot of references to aging/ growing old. Sort of a metaphorical take on the topic which I think was a strength.
On your next one you should go a little longer. I think the brevity took away from what you could have done with this if you fleshed it out more.
Still, a solid showing. Not spectacular but very solid. I think you had a good tone throughout and did a lot in a small space.
Activate_Self:
A very Activate Self verse if I may say so. Good technical ability and references to ancient times and vast conspiracies. An entertaining read. It does not really connect to the picture at all. I don't know how to handle this. Because I want to vote for your piece but it doesn't connect to the pic and Master Rock's went BY the pic.
I'm gonna go with my instinct to vote on the piece I liked better. But I won't be so kind next time AS, as you should please use the pic given next time.
V/ Activate Self BARELY
p.s. I did see your musical piece somewhere but it got deleted? That shit was fire from a poetic standpoint. Hope you saved it, you could put it on OM.
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