Netcees - View Single Post - DL round 1 (Universe vs Smod of War)-Universe Wins

Cereal · 08-18-2021, 04:22 PM

Creativity-- universe - took this one hands down the whole jew turned nazi to fit in but forced to play with the other children was dope, and the choose your own adventure element you really put in the work.. smods very colourful some tight concepts and creativity did shine through with apunchy feel to it

Entertainment-- universe - im going be honest small and compact is more my style so i was leaning towards smod but universe manage to hold my attention long enough to get his ghostly climax across..

Flow-- smod of war - his was tighter it ran smoother off the tongue, if you were to use it to a beat it def had that bounce to it.. universes wasnt loose by any means but just loose compared to smods..

Rhyme Scheme-- universe - tight thats pretty all i can say about that.. it starts hard by word ends with rhyme hard.. it was compact and complete.. smods a lil sloppy compared to a vet like universe but still clean

Consistency/Topic-- universe - he had a whole stanza which was the size of smods verse just capturing the topic where smod though was an emotional piece very abstract was still loose compared to how hard universe hit the topic.. i was like a solid brick lol

Literary Devices (alliteration, assonance, allusion, etc..) -- universe - came off more mature in his style, he really has worked his process in so its complex but not over bearing.. smods understanding though only new was pretty dope.. it was a hard one to choose..

Emotion-- universe - very powerful, the barer of bad news yet still willing to put up a fight for survival, i really dug your piece dude.. smod aswell the whole thing was straight to the heart loved it.

Imagery-- smod of war - so abstract very deep and colourful you really shone in this catagory.. universe was very discriptive but came across as a stale grey which is what he was going for to suit the terrain of a war story but in the end the colours are what brought the imagery to life with smod of wars verse

Vote-- universe

just as a whole it was dope, i mean it was long and i hate to call it a fault but thats just me i like small compressed verses to read.. still universe brought it

08-18-2021, 04:22 PM	#4
Cereal killa Join Date: Jun 2018 Posts: 860 Battle Record: 1-6 Rep Power: 1312300	Creativity-- universe - took this one hands down the whole jew turned nazi to fit in but forced to play with the other children was dope, and the choose your own adventure element you really put in the work.. smods very colourful some tight concepts and creativity did shine through with apunchy feel to it Entertainment-- universe - im going be honest small and compact is more my style so i was leaning towards smod but universe manage to hold my attention long enough to get his ghostly climax across.. Flow-- smod of war - his was tighter it ran smoother off the tongue, if you were to use it to a beat it def had that bounce to it.. universes wasnt loose by any means but just loose compared to smods.. Rhyme Scheme-- universe - tight thats pretty all i can say about that.. it starts hard by word ends with rhyme hard.. it was compact and complete.. smods a lil sloppy compared to a vet like universe but still clean Consistency/Topic-- universe - he had a whole stanza which was the size of smods verse just capturing the topic where smod though was an emotional piece very abstract was still loose compared to how hard universe hit the topic.. i was like a solid brick lol Literary Devices (alliteration, assonance, allusion, etc..) -- universe - came off more mature in his style, he really has worked his process in so its complex but not over bearing.. smods understanding though only new was pretty dope.. it was a hard one to choose.. Emotion-- universe - very powerful, the barer of bad news yet still willing to put up a fight for survival, i really dug your piece dude.. smod aswell the whole thing was straight to the heart loved it. Imagery-- smod of war - so abstract very deep and colourful you really shone in this catagory.. universe was very discriptive but came across as a stale grey which is what he was going for to suit the terrain of a war story but in the end the colours are what brought the imagery to life with smod of wars verse Vote-- universe just as a whole it was dope, i mean it was long and i hate to call it a fault but thats just me i like small compressed verses to read.. still universe brought it __________________ A-double scribble - A 19 th century euphemism for ass ..