Witty - Slick take on the topic... with that said, I still thought this was just decent. The execution was polished, though it wasn't anything out of the ordinary in my eyes. This verse reminded me a of 75% regenerated zombie. It was on its way to killing shit very properly, but the last 25% wasn't assembled and put to full use. It had elements of success but not elements of surprise or awakening. I'd have liked to read more of the morbid details, the small spaces, a glimpse into who the character is beyond a 'default' profile image.
dead man - Solid, solid. At first my interpretation was that you were describing this construct of evil as an urban setting, which can apply to almost any modern civilization if you fit it into the right context. Good references throughout, drawing parallels to the world around us, especially the military industrial complex and war profiteering. This felt like a more universally general verse from you, being you covered a lot of ground under a singular tarp. Overall, a solid display of the topic and rhythmically sound.
Vote - dead man
Keep doing you
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