i think this is botw
witty - morbid and well done. rather original take on the actions of a brutal psycho. although i think you could have expounded more on his backstory, and maybe develop other characters in his life, i was still entertained and impressed enough with the tale as a standalone event. it tied the topic to it wonderfully and the whole scene was paced very well, taking me through the actions so as i wouldnt get bored but i would understand everything that i needed to. the flow was real good although some of your metaphor seemed ratehr forced for the schemes sake (whitest sheep... why sheep? not particularly a symbol of purity as far as i know, although white, it could be ANY white noun) technically, it was real tight
deadman - flow and imagery were top notch as always, enjoyed this a lot. the concept of taking the purity of a jungle tribe ( my own image, i guess) and assimilating them to the real world was strong on its own, but the final four lines also put a different spin on it as well. evil can simply help us survive when it comes down to it, as what we perceive as our enemies are killed by our own hand, our survival rate goes up. i think that got away from the topic a little but mostly i dont even look at the topics when i read verses so i dont care
v- deadman, typical strong black verse, tough vote because wittys was quite good as well
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