07-10-2021, 06:35 PM
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HALL OF FAME
Join Date: Jan 2013
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Originally Posted by Alice
So I couldn’t really follow your flow here, the beginning was somewhat decent though regarding the scheme. But then you started going off on a tangent, both in terms of flow and content. Might be because it’s lengthy and wordy at the same time (am guilty of that myself). But I see you don’t really care about schemes so that explains it I guess. Being verbose is nice, can be great even, but I think your lines would’ve benefitted from finalised thoughts instead of half finished patterns. You incorporated some very unique concepts and thoughts like the „dream weaving“ part. This could’ve been good, maybe great even, if topics weren’t switched throughout. I enjoyed some of the patterns you incorporated. Somewhat decent.
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This is fair. Thank you.
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Originally Posted by Consensus
The cerebral assassin, the molder of minds, the Omni potent being. Time transcending traveler, wisdom incarnate. Veritas needs no intro but I guess I have to. He’s not know in the battling world but who doesn’t know veritas? The guy us always original and if you pay attention to his bars, dude brings the heat.. The gawd.
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