So I couldn’t really follow your flow here, the beginning was somewhat decent though regarding the scheme. But then you started going off on a tangent, both in terms of flow and content. Might be because it’s lengthy and wordy at the same time (am guilty of that myself). But I see you don’t really care about schemes so that explains it I guess. Being verbose is nice, can be great even, but I think your lines would’ve benefitted from finalised thoughts instead of half finished patterns. You incorporated some very unique concepts and thoughts like the „dream weaving“ part. This could’ve been good, maybe great even, if topics weren’t switched throughout. I enjoyed some of the patterns you incorporated. Somewhat decent.
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