I didn’t really follow the storyline here, but the imagery you presented it all with was great, the first half was my favorite and how you set up the picture was good I just had trouble following the storyline. My favorite piece was
“Enough flow to catch a cold due to the weather
Learned the talk with the stone of Rosetta
Stay cloaked with drinks coated in Amaretto
Shambled on the rocks built from a pebble.
Mind on a swivel with a bad fashion sense
Exaggerated action within the passive tense
Passing hits in this joint at this point lacks it's ends
Bluntly immaculate so enjoy then crash in 10.”
Keep writing man
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