I’m sorry you got no showed this week and didn’t get a chance to get any feedback on your piece.
I think it goes without saying that you’re a talented writer, I really like your descriptive language and the way you build your pieces, the flow can be a little tricky dependent more on eternal rhymes but still reads pretty well. Like the direction you took here, it wasn’t overly original as I’ve seen pieces like this before like “Put You on Game” by Lupe Fiasco, but it was still really enjoyable and I think it was carried by the awesome pictures you painted
“ Though some try to cheat me, but never have they won
Adultery’s beneath me. You're married to your fate
And Destiny’s my daughter; conceptually I’m akin
To an omnipresent father. An ever watchful eye.
The hawk in the sky. The spider on the web.
You’re caught in the twine. Your life is just a thread
In my lofty design. I’m what lost creatures find
At the end of every road. The truth in the lie
That refuses to erode. I’m like music to the soul
When I lull you to sleep. “For Whom the Bell Tolls”
Is the song that I sing, and a poem you may read
As I reap your final breath. I’m the devil in a dress.
The angel in a shroud. The great equalizer”
Really liked that segment.
Glad to have you compete in the playoffs
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