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Old 06-20-2013, 10:41 PM   #3
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Liked this silly ass shit for some reason. The civics gotta go tho man lol

Cruisin in a Civic to be specificin my pajamas

Thought it was really simple content wise. Had a smooth flow though, easy read and entertaining at least cause I just wasn't reaally sure what you were gonna toss out there next.

I suggest working on your concepts. Don't be so baasic, what I mean is this, I dug the fact that your shit had a sort of unpredictable feel to it, but the stuff you were saying just seemed teenager-ish, or like childish almost. Get more wicked with it. Use less frequently touched words/vocab. Think outside of the box.

Keep posting. Thanks for showing other posts love, good work
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