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Fraze - atmospheric intro, great emotional set-up. Been to Barcelona twice as well, love the city.

Father time/remix, dj concept is dope.

Lights shine at night time, hips greet melodies with a slight whine
The whole world seems aglow but that might be the white wine
^Enjoyed this as well, great writing. even tho wine/whine is a bit meh you saved it with slight/white.

Enjoy the next 2 stanzas a lot as well. Do feel that "just as my mind" reads a little choppy in terms of fluency of the sentence. Too many hard words in succession I think. Something like "while my mind" or something similar/different wording would help that bit. "Forgot that we forgot", not a big fan of using the same word twice in a sentence. If it hadn't been a champ match I probably wouldn't mention it.

Also, karaoke club on cinco de mayo doesn't quite make sense to me, expected a little more flavor in terms of that. And I think using that holiday a bit more in your favor would give further flavor to your story and location you picked out. Spanish people are known to throw great parties and festivities, the streets are filled on days like these.

Cool closure as well. Really dope take on the topic. A love story taking in the passage of time, a trip that'll eventually come to an end. Good stuff.

Diablo - first 4 lines is a dope intro. Tons of siblings experience parents, or others, playing favorites. Not fun and great storytelling to go along with it.

Don't really got much more to comment on as tge story progresses. It's a dark tale of the one left behind that emded up being filled with contempt and locked in on revenge. Eventually raping his wife by pretending to be someone he's not. Dark twist at the end.

Vote - Diablo. He had a fluent story from start to finish, great character development too. With a little more experience, a bit more fluent progression and pacing of the story along some literary devices to keep mind (certain sentence building and staying away from repetition of words) I could see Fraze snatching my vote in this cus he had that relatable emotional edge Diablo took too far to connect with but was dope in terms of the story.