Fraze
Liked the topic you chose and the kind of images you provoked here. Spain made for a cool backdrop and just the mention of time playing your memories, it just gave me this old school feel like put it through the old school lens of like a 90s Spike Lee joint. It was awesome. Liked you dropping mention of Spanish notes and etc. Just kind of resonated with me harder than like a general description. Kind of broke the mold with how fast this flame started and then burned out was dope liked the shorter verse but feel like you could have fleshed the theme out more your last few attempts have seemed rushed.
Lars
I liked this kind of diabolical tale it was really Universe-esque if you don’t mind me saying. Also reminded me of that Paul Rudd joint on Netflix which I can’t recall the name of at the moment lol I really liked the plot it was sort of a slow burn throughout and I didn’t really know what direction you were going in until you showed up at the house then I was like “YO he’s about to do it” lmao but I enjoyed this obviously you’re a very skilled writer and these pieces feel effortless like you just breathe them into existence. No complaint about anything here.
Think Diablo edged you here Fraze he had a great premise and though your piece was poetry in motion Diablo just was a cut above to me
V/Diablo
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