Interesting didactic as you both went for a similar back and forth somewhat this week.
I think given the “lightbulb moment” of a topic/idea it’s easy to see where you both drew the inspiration. Adverse’s piece, to me, drew darkly from the inspiration of his current predicament and the realities around him. There was a real sense of urgency and that our time is fleeting, his love for the craft isn’t what it was right now and that’s taken centre stage in his writing it seems. I felt the content to be very relatable, he tapped into the universal emotion at its heart and I’m sure many will find they can also relate to this predicament. It doesn’t last long though. Writing is in us all. It’s what we do. It’s an escapism we enjoy. A realm where we can express ourselves with somewhat anonymity where we otherwise may not feel comfortable. I hope his mind state improves.
Objective: I liked the idea behind this, similarly to what Adverse went for but yet unique to you also. The shorter lined rhythmic cadence and implied flow was to my tastes, I especially liked this couplet as I feel it shows the maturity to your writing as Objective 2.0 that wasn’t there earlier on:
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A mindful lightbulb hits a critical stage,
like: "what's rewiring in a digital age?"
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I thought that was a standout for me personally both in its wording, and execution. It was a sentiment that held weight.
The other line that stood out to me was the Thomas Edison reference and the lightbulb theorem closer. I did feel you went for the higher hanging fruit here overall, and it was a risk for sure, but one I did feel paid off ultimately and that was the deciding factor for me personally this week - the creativity and originality in Objective’s drop over the more emotionally invested insular tale from Adverse.
Vote - Objective