Lars:
A very solid, albeit predictable verse about heroin addiction. Reading it twice offers the reader all the little bits of foreshadowing that were there for those who didn't suspect the ending. Rhymes and flow on point. Will be tough to beat.
MMLP:
Also a solid piece. It appears to be about the vaccine but parts of the verse seemed more general than that. The rhymes and flow are pretty good.
Humanities damaged, as the weight of the worlds sanity, hangs in the balance.
I think this would flow just fine (or even better) without the commas.
Not going to penalize you for it, just giving you an observation.
Overall, I'm going with Lars here because his verse piqued my interest more. MMLP's was about the vaccine, but there were also some general parts that weren't as compelling as most of Lars's.
It's basically a preference vote. Both verses are good quality, but I have Lars being a bit better.
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