Master Rock
Man this was a nice read, there’s some dope vocabulary and imagery. Flow is a little choppy at points I thought some lines didn’t rhyme whatsoever but turns out they were just verrrrrryyyy long. That doesn’t bother me much because I’ve definitely dipped into that foray as well. But I think you’re leaps and bounds ahead of where you started even this season, I like how you brought the topic to life here. The part Universe posted resonates with me most as well I especially liked the line “I never knew hallowness had a sound” that just evokes the senses and gets the reader even more involved thought this was a strong piece on your end. Keep writing like that and you’ll find yourself in another champion match.
Mr. J
Your flow is naturally smooth man. It’s just a great ride every time. I too found you a little disconnected from the topic. It’s understandable because of you not even knowing you were signed in until the last second, I apologize for that again. I kind of liked the little meta section at the end and all the subtle jabs reminded me of what I did in black August vs Lars , but i again just didn’t feel like it connected to the picture all the way. I’m going to give a better breakdown in the mag but for now I’d rock with Rock his verse resonated with me more and really took all categories except flow
V/Master Rock
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