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You’re always the last in competitions until I close your casket.
As far as value? I’m mint condition and you’re open plastic.
this is light but reads nice. Nothing really interesting, unexpected etc here
Blue light, the way I’m cooking him, it’s like I see him as fresh meat.
Cuz after I spend the night w/ his girl he’ll have to use one of those on the bed sheet.
'blue light' is so far removed from the punchline the bar feels a bit disjointed. Not a bad concept but execution isn't great
He keeps acting hard, but he’s softer than cloth you can sew in a fabric.
Because blue constantly stinks up the place like mold in the attic.
I'm all for ridiculous end rhymes but 'sew in a fabric' makes me wonder if anyone else reads setups. Feels like a complete waste. Could be used to prime the reader for the punch instead of being unrelated, existing only for the rhyme
We ain’t in the same pedigree, you beating me would be a true shocker.
Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.
my understanding of blue blocker is that they're the glasses that block blue light? I don't see how it's related at all aside from blue and blocker being able to fit next to each other and make grammatical sense



Do you mean a black light you fat fucking loser??
well this doesn't feel kosher... I know you didn't mean anything by it but people have been dq'd for less

Eviction aka Dia sick
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still livin’ w/ mom & dad because of “debt repayment”
on NC you’re a Low Level Boarder. in real life you rent the basement
considering I haven't read a dia bar in a minute I could be wrong, but this is a pretty fresh use of the personal angles
Dia wasn’t a dumb enough name to come out of ya mouth?!
cool alias tho, perfect for when they finally kick you outta the house
okay
too embarrassed to have ppl over for some chow & grub
when it comes to feeding frenzy’s never able to stop eating around his chums
this is light to me, but I respect the consistency within the verse of not doing a bar about him having no friends.
nothin’ but a slimy swamp guy with a tiny cock size
ex let him down gently but it takes the whole staff everytime he rock climbs
gone


Blue had stronger bars with the opener and closer. Props to dia for not making a stink about the blue light stuff

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