[Universe]

Objective:

Another heart-type topic for Objective... I feel bad. Mix it up, Adverse! Anyway, cool beginning. Liked this line:

"Unlearn language, that's when being real is truthful"

So dope. Wished you expanded on this a little more. You seem to drop gems and move on quicker than a jittery diamond thief lol. KNOW when you have something worthwhile like the above line and expand... the concept about forgetting language to be real with yourself about how you feel is a concept worth exploring.

You definitely have some nice lines man. I'm feeling a lot that you have to say. But I'm going to use your own words against you here...

"Who said life isn't wary, clearly unfair and endearing,
so why are you fearing the depths that you're nearing?"

- Love this bar but it sums you up perfectly. You skip over concepts too quickly... Give them time to breathe. Expand your lines into SCHEMES - it gives them life; And lets us truly appreciate what you're saying. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy finding the gems you sprinkle around in your verses, bur I find myself getting use to your style and wanting more from you...

And you know what? You're capable of it. This was a good piece of writing this week Objective and you're getting better and more consistent as you go. I know you flirt with the idea of quitting a lot but stick with it because you are growing as a writer before our eyes. Good stuff.


Scar:

When you told Objective to just no-show earlier I was instantly psyched to read your verse. I love when you get cocky lol... It means a full effort is on the way. Let's check it out...

Okay, first impression is you have set up a literal WAR between the heart and brain - that's fucking dope lol. Intro set the tone nicely, felt a little too wooden though at points, like reading an instruction manual... but it's tough to set the stage for an epic concept like this... Overall I'm feeling it. And LOL @ The Ultimate Warrior reference. I'm already cheering for heart... and actually if you're true to the topic heart should win haha.

Man... This is fun to read. I'm really into it. I kind of wish it was just a book though... I feel the rhyming is just sort of an afterthought here... and you can tell because of the loose connections. What you REALLY want to say is BETWEEN the rhymes here. But the detail is vast enough for me to not really be bothered by what's lacking in the technical department... At least for now.

Cool little ending with Scorpio being powered by love and killing the brain. A touching ending amidst the chaos. Again, this was rather weak technically (you rhymed family with family at one point ) but the story was so damn entertaining and original it made up for it.

I think if you had some more time with this you could really nail down the shortcomings and make this everything it could've been, but even in it's current state, I love it. Just so epic, and in terms of unique storytelling - It doesn't get much better.

Good battle guys. Objective did his thing but should've expanded on his brilliant concepts. He wins in a few categories here but Scar's story and originality really stood out for me. I enjoyed reading his take on this topic and found myself wanting it to be longer. Much longer, actually. Always a compliment when you can accomplish that.

Vote - Scar