[Universe]

Candy:

Cool take here. I felt you sort of settled your mind on a different level for this one - more cogent and coherent, for you lol. Had some cool lines in there but they always seemed to be littered with spelling errors or just janky wording. But I liked this:

"Beyond the coco's (cuckoo's?) nest of my hand
When they realize I was the last land
In between time and homes of bred bars
Perimeters set from the grass seed stars"

You can be descriptive when you want to be, and although this was a difficult topic, I felt you did well with it overall. I loved the effort put in here.

Good work.


Objective:

This is a different take. Started out strong but I felt the middle section sort of had some forced rhymes that didn't really read very well, and quite frankly, didn't really rhyme...(closely/monthly - bravery/salary)

I really liked this section though:

"Now their smiles whispering hints of the useless and blind,
with her coins in exchange to not pay any mind."

and...

"Aches breaks her apart, shakes takes laughs from her heart,
sons souls plastered in tar, mastered the art of taking advantage
and manage it smart, their anthem is savage in bars,
in tune to what the darkest parts of humanity are."

Damn. I think if the whole thing was written like this it would've been an impressive piece and an easy win for you. But I just didn't like where it went after that story-wise (the inheritance angle to me was meh) and technically it fell down a level or two as well. Still, even with all this... it's very close. Your high's were well beyond Candy's...

I think Candy was more consistent but never reached the peaks that Objective did. Candy stayed on topic but had a lot of spelling and wording issues. Some lines were just incoherent and hard to decipher. Objective sort of took this in a weird direction but he had some highlights that shone through the muck... I'm going to reward the verse that had the most potential, I think. Going Objective in a razor close decision.

Vote - Objective