Nigma - Your ability to display storytelling at the author's point of view was pretty remarkable. And like Vulgar was saying how you were coming from a combination of different angles, than made me feel you did a good job showing that you were capable to illustrate your story. You came up with a character, and it was almost as though I grew up with that character as I continued reading. You brought it to life, and that's something I truly pleased by. Now from a lyrical aspect, you used catchy rhyme scheme to keep the reader engaged in your writing.
Frank - After reading your piece, I was very pleased with what you had wrote. You've shown a lot of the same qualities as Nigma had shown in his writing. I was very engaged with your story and like how you were able to organize your sequence of events. I thought that showed alot of creativity of your part. However, I was disappointed with your rhyme scheme. You did seem a little unbalanced and it potentially ended up being your downfall. I think you could work on your consistancy as far not only your rhyme scheme but staying on topic with your writing as well. Only because I found myself getting just a little bit lost in your piece not due to a lack of interest like I said before I found it enjoyable, but I was lost in the sense of not knowing where the story was headed. It had its ups and down, but you show a lot of promise and show why you were crowned Art of Writing League Champ.
Overall - Now I'm new to the site and not very sure how this section is suppose to be looked at exactly from a voting aspect, but if I was trying to see which one demonstrated better lyrical ability I would have to give that to Nigma. I found Frank's story to very interesting, but was just a little off track. I did however enjoy both drops and found both to be extremely creative, but Nigma got the edge on this one.
Vote - Nigma
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