Loved this. You poured your creativity into this piece with a fresh take on a well travelled topic, linking it to the pictures you posted and blended it into a compelling narrative with twists and turns that kept me engaged from beginning to end. The flow was consistent and the vocab choice was strong throughout. I like how you changed font and text size to add the biblical feel of chapter and verse. It was a nice touch. It feels like you're setting up for a
sequel. If so, I'll keep an eye out for it.
Good work man.
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Originally Posted by Blue Bayou
Johnny Webbed Feet's topicals are all the same. Doesn't anyone notice this?! I FEEL LIKE IM TAKING CRAZY PILLS
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Originally Posted by Sinacog
Learn to write, Johnny 6 Feet..
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