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Originally Posted by evaD
You wanna avenge ur last L well a decent starts what we’ll need to see
But if INF hit the ground running I’ve just picked him off as he flees the scene
ok. a little light but still cool
I’m a trailblazer. If someone said he’s dope I wanna know whom?
Wack faggot wouldn’t pull up trees in James’ tomato grow room
wording is nice but i have no clue wtf james is
Your rhymes are overly complex bullshit, but it isn’t clever in any kinda way
When I flip rhymes it’s money.. we can’t make head nor tails of what you’re tryna say
this is ok
I’m in the top punches every week.. you haven’t made it since.. NEVER
In fact if you wanna see inf in it you’re gonna be waiting around forever
nice wp. liked this. wording is nice too
I can’t call em good but I’ll say motivational if it’ll help
Those concepts got me wanting to read up.. on the fastest way to kill myself
not feeling this
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Quotes: hit the ground running, head or tails, inf in it,
Close: n/a
Couple lines missed to me but still a nice read, you have smooth wording.
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Originally Posted by INF
Lil bro follows in Zuchs footsteps but lack wins in perspective
Easy to use a Sun Angle when he's in a Sticks Shadow w/ no sense of direction
concept is cool, but rhyme and wording are a little forced.
Goin pics vs Des proved shopping shades needs better vision
Being broke Hertz. Them lower Frame Rates couldn't display a Fresher Image
like the concept. wording hurts you a little but i'll give you this one
User doesn't move too well.. critiquing lines a minor nuisance
Ya ask for Joint Support to "go over shit" & he's NEVER Inclined to do it
not feeling this
Homo actin straight. secret project so strange & it's spooky
Ur Philadelphia Experiment is modeling life after Tom Hank's in the movie
this strikes me as a weird thing to say about someone
Shove the piece in Dave's mouth forces me to clasp the trigger
Surprise w/ another Ring... a couple light his roof up like a Romantic Dinner
not feeling this
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Quotes: low frame rates
Close: sun angle
I like the creativity but I think you need really crisp wording for some of the concepts you're using to work. If you're going for more complex ideas the easier you make it for readers to follow your train of thought the less chance you lose them along the way. You do a good job of using setup to lay the ground work, just need to work on using wording to stick the landing. I like your style tho man, keep doing your thing.
Vote: Dave Dave wins with better execution and wording but INF dropped a solid verse. INF had more creative ideas but Dave executed on his concepts smoothly enough to take this pretty comfortably.