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Just a quick vote from me here, sorry guys.

Master Rock:

Didn't really like the beginning of this, kind of lazy writing like MMLP alluded to. But it def picked up and you ended it well. I think if the entire piece was like the end it would've been a much better read.

That said, lots of bad wording littered this piece. You repeated words everywhere and it just came off rather ho hum. It had its moments though... just not enough of them to overshadow the lows.


Lucipher Howlz:

Loved the multi's from a technical standpoint, but again they got in the way of the story. It's impressive to see your ability on display but if you stay the course against the top guys here (aka me) you won't win. I'm saying this to motivate you, keep your multi's but really delve into more story driven content, and build the plot and/or characters.

If you find the right mix, you will succeed.

Loved this part:

"lay restless but I can hear every word that is spoke-
caught in between realms thats why earth is a joke-
Cant choose between heaven & hell cus the curtain is closed -
But the fire inside me is certain there's smoke"

Overall this was solid, but I struggled to find any real meaningful connection to the topic outside of a few things here and there. Still, enough talent was on display to get you the W.

Vote - Lucipher Howlz