Netcees - View Single Post - WEEK TWO: OBJECTIVE 0-1 vs EVICTION 0-1 OBJECTIVE WINS

Universe · 11-24-2020, 07:03 PM

Yeah, first of all... this topic is garbage lol. I'd be pissed to get this with all the other amazing pictures this week. Anyway...

Objective:

Cool story albeit slightly predictable. The whole human vs. robot in a televised wrestling match is literally the first thing that comes to mind when I see your topic - maybe we've just seen the same movies or something lol. Not really your fault, you work with what you're given.

Technically it was good but not quite at the level of your previous week's verse. I did enjoy the imagery behind it all though; very easy to get absorbed into this world you created. Some lines were kind of dumb though near the end... maybe childish is the better word. I'm being picky but I'm holding you to a higher standard because of last week.

I thought you had a really strong connection to the topic though. Overall, a solid showing.

Eviction:

This read well. Flow was good and technically everything seemed on point. I felt it lacked in the story department though. I get what you were going for here in your take on the topic, and I appreciate the non-straight forward approach, but would've liked to have seen some more plot/character elements dropped in there like you did last week.

Technically you have Objective beat but he pummeled you story-wise.

Close battle in my eyes. I'll side with the better story here...

Vote - Objective

11-24-2020, 07:03 PM	#11
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Yeah, first of all... this topic is garbage lol. I'd be pissed to get this with all the other amazing pictures this week. Anyway... Objective: Cool story albeit slightly predictable. The whole human vs. robot in a televised wrestling match is literally the first thing that comes to mind when I see your topic - maybe we've just seen the same movies or something lol. Not really your fault, you work with what you're given. Technically it was good but not quite at the level of your previous week's verse. I did enjoy the imagery behind it all though; very easy to get absorbed into this world you created. Some lines were kind of dumb though near the end... maybe childish is the better word. I'm being picky but I'm holding you to a higher standard because of last week. I thought you had a really strong connection to the topic though. Overall, a solid showing. Eviction: This read well. Flow was good and technically everything seemed on point. I felt it lacked in the story department though. I get what you were going for here in your take on the topic, and I appreciate the non-straight forward approach, but would've liked to have seen some more plot/character elements dropped in there like you did last week. Technically you have Objective beat but he pummeled you story-wise. Close battle in my eyes. I'll side with the better story here... Vote - Objective __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..