Objective
Liked the format this week. Short stanzas packed with rhymes. Good stuff. I was eager to see what came next as I read. I didn't exactly "get" the ending but I still liked the piece as a whole.
Eviction
Fairly long verse with quality rhymes and cadence. But what is it saying? It seems to be saying a hundred things, but doesn't give me a clear trope or something to hang onto.
Based on your writing skills you can do some real damage in this league if you focus your message. I just didn't "connect" with the piece like I did to Objective's.
V/ Obj
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