Master Rock
Starts off almost as a stream-of-consciousness. The first half has some cliche or elementary wording. Got stronger in the middle and towards the end-- the guy's world is crashing in on him and you described that aptly.
Lucipher Howlz
Good rhyming and multis. There is a story here. It's not great IMO, but it's a decent story with rhyming and multis. Wanted to see what comes next.
I am leaning towards voting for Lucipher Howlz, and I will.
Rock, your simple beginning might have costed you. I did notice that towards the end it was more immersive, but it just wasn't quite enough to take it this week.
V/ LH
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