[Mr. J]

This is a goofy topic and not really something I'd find myself writing to.....

Objective you have improved a lot since I've last read your work. Before the league I mean. Your transitioning has been much smoother and the concept although goofy works to your advantage here. You bring out the nuances that make the idea meld together nicely. Up until the screws loose area. The whole I am Thor exclamation just seemed like an odd idea to present itself and made me chuckle a bit. Towards the end it felt like your motivation was dwindling but your performance was well put.

Eviction I don't recall reading anything from you before so you must be another newcomer. Which is cool. You take the topic and blend it into a twisted picture that works with the scheme you were bringing but I feel like you could have cut half of this verse out and had a much better showing. At the start you worked an idea I thought you would have kept throughout but then as it progressed you contradicted your points. In most situations that would work preferably at the end of the verse but you kept your movement fluent and dropped some nice couplets throughout. Nice work.

This was my least favorite topic so far.

But y'all did what you had to and made it work to your advantage. Objective has been stepping it up and the newcomer is pushing to be a challenger in the weeks to come. I felt like both could use some improvements and could have compensated from shortening up their verses a bit. But when you can write beyond what your opponent does it's anyone's game at this point. At the end of the day though.....It felt like Objective swept this one up due to his ability to carry the topic thoroughly. His opponent did great but suffered to the bulk of the verbiage construing what he brought forth originally. Pretty even match for the most part and was worth reading....

Still didn't like the topic though.

V/Objective