LH, I let you post late because you corresponded with me before the due date but please try your best to post on time next week? I appreciate you
This battle was pretty even in a lot of ways I don’t feel like either of you took too many chances with the picture kind of taking it at face value, I feel like Rock did a better job of portraying a mind state deteriorating.
But Rock I didn’t dig your flow as much as last week’s...also the imagery that made your verse so good last week seemed to be lost here. There weren’t layers to what you were saying everything was pretty cut and dry I also think you over-focused on rhymes. It just seemed overstuffed and really most of the words didn’t serve a purpose were just there to rhyme and that’s it. So a step back from last week definitely.
Lucipher - also think you took a couple steps back this week man and it felt rushed because it probably was and though your story wasn’t as fast or compelling. But I like the ending scene and this piece right here
“Hands up! Get out the car and he told me to freeze-
I did the opposite as I listened to the cold winter breeze-
holding the leaves, lay on my stomach, I'm scolding the tree-
The coldness in me is worthless, so I went & sold it for free-
no purchase, I'm worth it? cus my soul isn't me-“
Really cool bit and I think that’s what pushed you over the top this week.
This was a decent battle but you’re both better writers than you portrayed this time. You’re dope and maybe it was the picture but it just wasn’t there this week I got LH winning this by being more compelling.
V/LH
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