Great battle. Highly anticipated matching the two of you I believe your styles mesh well together and you guys are both great veteran writers.
Mr J - I think in this battle you were more of the “bigger picture” guy instead focusing around yourself you extended your outreach. You were technically refined though I thought the rhyme schemes were a step back from what you had previously done in our inaugural week. The multis weren’t as rapid fire here, I dug the subject matter and the ending bar was cool. I also like the opening four and how they were sort of meta.
MMLP - I really like the form you’re bringing this season. Really liked the existentialism of your piece and some of the questions you posed. It was really introspective and honestly these things presented we’ve all asked ourself at one point or another, it resonated hard with me personally and I did think you kind of confined yourself to your own mind which you think would make your world a whole lot smaller to write in but you appealed to the masses with relative questions and kept it in engaging throughout.
“ I must exist in some way and thats starting in my head
struggled with assumptions that were harbouring dissent.
It was harder to accept so henceforth, perhaps.
Descartes had said it best, I think therefore I am
but be careful in that, envisaging this existence at hand
If this is all an hallucination… what is it, I am...”
Was a great way to end this.
I don’t really have any qualms with J’s piece, other than I don’t think he went as deep into the “labyrinth” as MMLP did, still a good technical verse. I just think MM had a more attention grabbing verse. Neither verse took a whole lot of chances but I liked what you both brought I’m going with MM but that’s my preference. This was really a good battle
V/MMLP
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