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Candy: This was a lot to take in. Love the language used and the way the words feel natural as they fluently blends into each other through asonance and rhythmic patterns not veering too much from its original path. Some tongue twisters that made me enjoy the cadence quite a bit.

I do feel like punctuation here and there would help you out a little bit, especially in the last 5 lines/your closure.

Amidst a midsummers whispers wished they wasnt
Washing hemoglobin soaked in dreamt promise
^Your intro is fresh tho, a syllable off being perfect but still solid and fresh. Also not sure if you meant to write "the wasn't" or "they wasn't", cus the latter makes sense while the other makes me a bit on edge. In terms of the syllables I'm thinking that "wished the wasn't" and "dreamt promise" is off by a hair.

A couple of nomads where none as brass as such cast
An outlander of sorts, contorts between us trash
^I also think that "A couple nomads" would help your flow here by removing "of", seeing how you're using "of" again in the next sentence it would also help to not make it feel as repetitive

Two jesters rest, floating above the shrubbery
Mumbling chants of ancient mantras huddling
A couple of nomads where none as brass as such cast
An outlander of sorts, contorts between us trash
In the land of the undead there is a group setting
Heirs and tiers like tears and peers prewetting
^This is where your shit gets good/better tho and keeps my attention to the end.

Eerie and creepy atmosphere, would love to see some fantasy Netflix episode of this shit. Overall a cool submission that makes me interested to see what Concrete has to offer.

Concrete: Interesting and captivating stanza to start it off by.

Second stanza brings the story along and brings your character to the brink of paranoia and being lost.

entrapped by fear, I concluded there was no campus near
^Personally I think the contraption "there's" is better suited to fit the flow better. "There was" breaks the cadence a little.

Eerie as fuck, third stanza put me on the edge of my seat. Good stuff!

like stuttering nerd
^Like a stuttering nerd, OR, like stuttering nerds. As it stands now it makes grammar nazis arise from the Chad and Karen havens of too many fucks given.

Your fifth stanza screams of a bad trip on acid to me, haha! Enjoyed it quite a bit! The closure wraps it up well enough. Definitely sounds like an acid trip to me, whether or not it's a bad trip is up to the person experiencing it to say, lol.

Vote: I enjoyed Candy's play with words here and there, cadence and generally a good write up. Concrete had a good story of a hunter going through some existential hallucinations brought upon by forest spirits of sorts that I really dug as well.

It's kinda close but after having read each piece twice I'm going by Concrete for the storytelling and visual elements tied within. Candy did an exceptional job as well overall with a few hiccups but so far the best I've read from him. If I should bring any advice to Candy it would be to not take the topics supplied too literal, instead of describing everything that's going on in the image it would be dope to tie a story to it (where's the master from? How did they get to know him? Why are they there?) Adding these elements could probably snatched the vote for me cus I loved the atmosphere from start to finish and the concept, alas Concrete gets my vote with also a pretty dope atmospheric piece but the better story and overall feel to go along with it.

Definitely a good battle I enjoyed in full, looking forward to see how the two of you keep elevating your pen-game throughout the league.