First of all, thank you for breaking down your vote further... makes sense and much appreciated.
Very cool verse. Your ability to carry a rhyme scheme passed the point most people are able to is impressive. Flow was great too. Just an overall easy read but with a lot of depth...
This was another piece this week that had an odd number of lines though... 23... so weird.
But yeah other than that, good work here. Loved the final bar.
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