[Objective]

Concrete: I like the title you gave to the topic given, and jumping straight into it with the first 4 lines. No need to dwell on anything, good shit.

the good one long gone bad as the world looked glum
actualized by redrum and bedlam - enter the hoodlum
^This was fun to read, I like the tongue in cheek and good intro to your character.

First stanza was dope af as far as I'm concerned. Second stanza slightly more lackluster in terms of rhymeschemes from the heavy first, but that might not be a bad thing if you get back into it with the next ones as you've already kinda set the standard for your piece. That said, content-wise this is really good stuff.

Third stanza is cool, can't compete with the other two but definitely keeps the story going. Good shit.

Fourth stanza was definitely cool, the finishing couplet wrapped it all together perfectly and you picked apart the topic with ease. You seemed inspired and motivated on this one, solid stuff overall.

Activate Self: The first 3 lines was pretty cool. Heavier twist on the topic in terms of vocab, references and similies than Johnny's but both verses are equally dope quality-wise. Hah "Odin and Eve", interesting and cool mix of characters considering the concept you're going for as well.

Covid-19 a hoax or a prayer prepared by a Pope only know to the heirs of Paradise Lost
^Was honestly hoping there wouldn't be any references to the virus in your piece, I see what you're doing but it disappointed me a little, what's the connection to the Paradise Lost guys? Struggling to find the connection you're making here, maybe I'm just stupid.

Taking pages from Gate's and Belphegor's book: 'Technology's (S)Pawns and Digital Rooks'
^Hah! Good one, liked this one and the use of Belphegor, a bit forced with (S)Pawns but definitely works on paper proving text has its advantages in terms of creativity. Cool one.

"You'll live to regret the Quantum Computer that opened the West to demonic intruders"
Lovecraftian Loopers are plotting a war by locking the doors to higher dimensions
^You got some really dope couplets and ideas here and there, a few I might not get tbph like the Paradise Lost reference. I googled it now to cross-check my IQ-levels and I'll honestly say I didn't know of that poem before, so translation to me as a dumb reader got lost in the mix. A risk you take as a writer when jotting down shit as complex as this. I'm digging it now but also drew me a bit away from reading it in completion. Don't stop writing like this tho, shit's dope but a thing to keep in mind that may lose you some votes in the future cus people like me may not get the full extent of your piece. You probably already know this tho and I love what you put together here, dope af

Both noticeably missing from their local positions are the Sun and the Moon
Cos Lucifer’s shadow eclipses the view in the form of new shoes that crushes our tomb
^Dope closure

Vote: Well... This one is fucking hard to vote on tbh. Both had equally great pieces in their respective styles. Concrete had a consistent and solid story, albeit a bit safe it was well executed with a rather lacking third stanza if I should pick out a drawback at all. Activate Self took the topic to new heights by writing a piece about how developments of humans destroy themselves through means of technology and their own inevitable downfall of man as we push each other down bit by bit with every advancement we make, while greed gets the better of us. Clever references throughout that connects the dot to a deeper meaning behind it all, Lucifer's plot on humans can be understood literally or figuratively depending on how you look upon money/fear being used by either our own desires or him as a higher entity which makes sense considering the references to the Bible here and there. I got to read em both again.

After a second read and taking in Activate Self's verse I personally enjoyed his more, the replay value is really great as I took more time to see the connections. In the end MVGT Self Activate for great literary techniques, crazy rhymeschemes and interesting references, creative spins and similies combined for a well thought out verse that definitely did it for me in the end. Probably the best I've read from him yet, he went in! That isn't to draw too much back on Concrete's piece tho, cus that was solid in its own but ye, after a second read Self Activate definitely takes it for me.

Good battle, enjoyed the re-reads as well for sure!