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Old 11-14-2020, 03:25 PM   #2
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You finally didn't no-show! That deserves a round of applause in and of itself lol...

Nah, but for real this was cool man. I dug your take on this, some solid wordplay/concepts sprinkled in there. You wording was off though at a couple points, I noticed... but I filled in the gaps. No real issue... just thought I'd mention it.

I liked this part the best:

"I feel the part of the substance and dirt of which we derive
produce me a seed while I intertwine, flirting with the rain in the sky
cloud 9, I feel so high, this rush penetrates while voltage fertilizes
terrestrial sun kisses making out till its alive
"

Good stuff.
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