interesting, both have what I'd call older styles of battling. Ajax w/ the witty short/long punchline style & Eviction the longer, box verses... Ajax had The Bends, 10 Fold, Hand over Fist lines that sealed it. Wording & execution much better.
From Evic opener was ok - liked the concept of chemical peel. My first concern is your multies are fine but you take too long to get to the point. I think you'll refine your style as your progress in the league... punches are fairly basic as of now...
V - Ajax
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