Gonna do a feed as I read kinda situation. For the intro portion I was entertained by your always impressive vocabulary and it's cosmic reaches. Each line was top notch, consistent, none standing out over the others, until, POW:
"I spent days at the market excavating Huey Newton, Wu Tang, blues,
As Ku Klan brutes sat outside of Scrooge land stoops"
^Thought that was dope, especially following up the killer segment, really got me into the verse. Felt the next line could have been removed the, cardboard city one.
"Shipwrecked on a life boat playing double jeopardy with the bottom contestant "
^ Stood out to me. Cool one line, also liked the "I'm on cancers wish list" line
Damn that whole section is doooope:
"I’m cancer’s wish list. I’m an opiate nursery food drive.
Mixed with dopamine purposely freeze-dried. Hercules’s new bride.
Hurts to be too sly so you have to balance the act, take your apron off"
DQ line was read and approved. Felt the images used in the closing portion were kind of an odd medley, not terrible since it was still interesting, but references with some similar tone might have sounded better, to my preference anyways.
This is a really dope verse. One of my favs from you recently
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